Fangala the Flying Feline

Hiya. I decided to critique this one because I was stuck in the San Francisco airport for about six hours. I really wanted to get out and see the town, ...

Not bad, Pawprint. Not bad at all. You always have good ideas. However...soldiers pinching babies? Sorry, but that just seems weird. Also, the whole princess without a voice reminds me ...

Ayra, that was gorgeous! Wow. I really have nothing to say. You have an incredible grasp of imagery and your story flows well. I don't know why people were so ...

Anyone up for a crit exchange? I'll review any one thing in your portfolio if you review any one thing in mine. Come on...how can you pass up an offer ...

Woohoo! Now I know what your real name is. Jared, Jared, Jared. I'm gonna call you Jared. Sorry, am I annoying? Wait, that's stupid question. Anyway, it's great to know ...

AMAZING! I totally agree with Azila that this is the best thing you've written. I really can't see anything wrong with this. It's gentle but exciting and has a great ...

OMG! I love dragons so much. :D However, this is so riddled with grammatical errors that I could hardly read it. I won't bother correcting them, but you should read ...

Oh, wow. I liked this. However, I have a problem with the narrator. It's like a bizarre cross of third and first person. It makes it hard to really get ...

Aw, that was sweet! I loved this; it was so gentle and warm and fuzzy after the heartrending drama of Beautifully Evil. However, I got pretty confused about the Oath. ...

Awesome, canis! That last part made my heart flutter. Very cool. However, I must complain that you're still telling, not showing. Maybe an example would make it easier to understand. ...

Hi again, canis. I'm glad you cleared that up for me. Fixing it is really pretty simple. Instead of having the caribou have an injured leg, have it be old ...

Thanks, Seraph! You know, I really am a comedy writer at heart. It's just what I do best. I could spend my whole life writing weird random things about evil ...

Note: I just want to make it clear that I do not share religious beliefs with the Pink Pony of Doom. Thank you. I woke up at 3 am. It ...

I like Talulah! Great job, canis. Let me just point out a few things I noticed. Your paragraphs are really long. This isn't necessarily bad, but I think people in ...

Hey there. You're an amazing writer, but I have to say I was a little disappointed with this part. It's basically a list of farm chores--feed the chickens, pet the ...